me off key

October 26, 2009

i drink the sweet sticky sugar
that drips from your fleshy wound
i listen to you strum those worn out strings
pulled from my heart while i sleep
not afraid for the world to hear
the song that reveals my deepest fear
as you laugh with that intoxicating smile
that sparkle that makes me forget who i am
as you sing me just a bit off key

derek

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8 Responses to “me off key”

  1. Bonnie Says:

    derek

    I’ve read this three times. Each time, I am left speechless. Wow this is good.

    • derek Says:

      thank you bonnie, your words mean so much to me.

      this piece comes straight from an aching inside my heart. a feeling i must release through words.

  2. Bonnie Says:

    You made me feel that and a lot more.

  3. Ed Says:

    So glad I dropped by again…..me speechless, too…..

    ” as you sing me just a bit off key”

    oh my, Derek, what a stunner.

    ed

    • derek Says:

      thank you Ed, i’m learning, slowly. it is still hard to believe that i am even attempting to write poetry. the IB broke loose some screws in my head and now i just love this new form of expression. you, Heath, Bonnie and Keith have been a huge inspiration to me. i am so lucky to have stummbled into the IB world and met such amazing people. i am very much a different person because of that experience. still a goofball, but with more confidence.

      derek

  4. Jordan Says:

    beautiful explosions in my ears… and on my lips as I read and reread…

    from yours.

  5. Uncle Tree Says:

    It’s a good thing your name’s not Jack.
    O’Lantern, that is. Har-dee-har-har. Me off key?

    Happy Halloween! (That’s frightfully suspicious.)

    Your minstrel’s song has a spooky
    sweet tooth touch to it. I think
    your wife knows too much. Scary.

    Very well done, doodleman!

    *

    Merry Christmas, Derek!
    Wishing you and your family a great 2010, UT

    *

    And thanks again for the support
    you’ve so freely given me throughout
    these last 8 weeks. Really! HO! HO! BOO!
    It’s been much appreciated. Cheerz! Me2off


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